My Writing Submission for Top Cow Talent Hunt

Sabine Wheel of Shadows

Although it’s only been a few days since Top Cow ended their talent hunt, I thought I’d share what I submitted with you all. Remember, I’m only a writer (not an artist) so what you’re about to read is the one page synopsis and 8 page full script that I submitted.

Please enjoy and feel free to email me with comments although negative comments will not be tolerated. (you know the kind I’m talking about)

Thanks everyone!

Please click  Artifacts: Sabine “Revenge Best Served Cold-Blooded”  to read my submission.


4 Comments on "My Writing Submission for Top Cow Talent Hunt"

  1. Ross says:

    Damn. To be honest I was hoping it was pish but it was really good. Better than mine. Damn.

  2. Jeremy says:

    All right, I just did a quick read on the Sundial of Ahaz and I’m jealous that you were able to tie that in. Is this your own original connection, or has Top Cow indicated at all it had a biblical basis? If you came up with that on your own, kudos again. One of the cool challenges for the Top Cow Universe is coming up with the mythology and history of the artifacts… right now most of them are floating in a sort of informational vacuum. Way to show that you can broaden and deepen the mythology.

  3. Jeremy says:

    Hey Jocelyn, yesterday I came to your site after googling the Top Cow Talent Hunt. I submitted a script/pitch myself and I was looking for anybody else talking about their experience. I was surprised when you mentioned that you had submitted a script featuring Sabine.I ended up writing a Finnegan solo pitch but she was my initial choice as well. I ended up abandoning the character because I just couldn’t figure out how to make her work as a protagonist… She just seemed too irredeemably evil. Also, I couldn’t figure out how to make her work as in the old universe she appeared to be an artificial construct of the Angelus (though that was never clarified for certain), and I got hung up on how to write someone who had never been human. Kudos for the bold decision to simply make her human in the new universe but tying her profession and history into her former existence, letting you write a character with the same basic psychology, but more human and possibly redeemable. I liked your pacing and dialogue as well. The Internal monologue was evocative and the dialogue had that clipped, military pacing that we come to expect in espionage/special ops. And way to do your research and put some thought into tying the Artifact into biblical terms. Just that little bit already started to give the Wheel more weight, reality and mystery than in any of the books its appeared in before.

    What else drew you to Sabine as a character? Like I said, I tried and failed to relate to the Lucifer/Fallen Angel thing. Especially in the Witchblade and Angelus books she’s just so cruel and ruthless. What sort of character would you write her as if you win the Hunt?

    • Jocelyn says:

      Hi Jeremy,

      I chose Sabine for the sheer challenge of trying to give her an “origin” in the new Top Cow Universe. I felt she was the toughest character to rewrite and/or reinvent and that got me excited about giving it a shot.

      The first pitch I wrote I ended up scrapping when I realized the direction it had gone in was too similar to an already current Artifacts characters. I’ll admit there were many times I was banging my head against the wall trying to figure out a way to tie it all together. Thanks for reading and giving me such a lovely compliment on my pitch!

      Even if I don’t get the gig I can tell you that I learned a lot about CIA, black-ops, military covert operations, etc. with the countless hours I spent researching it. 🙂

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